Botanical Musings : Haiku

The following phrases were given by De Jackson as part of the Botanical Wordlist Challenge on Imaginary Garden With Real Toads. 
  • sight-seeing in a daisy 
  • the silent roar of the vast 
  • stealing the sun 
  • the story of the grasses
  • a strong, bent contrivance 
  • flowers that will not wait for the snow
  • employ the wind
I decided to attempt my first set of Haiku (3-line verses) using the above phrases. I will forgo the syllabic restrictions to accommodate the phrases (as well as for convenience. I can't count syllables to save my life!).







Dew drop lenses
Sight-seeing in a daisy
Universes revealed











The silent roar of the vast
yellow field deafens;
Sunflowers stealing the sun
















To hear tell of
the story of the grasses
Employ the wind
















Bamboo dances in wind
A strong, bent contrivance;
Fluidly unbreakable













Impatient beauty
Flowers that will not wait
for the snow to melt









Reposted for Open Link Monday on Imaginary Garden With Real Toads

52 comments:

  1. I am impressed, blown. Each one is exquisite. Difficult to pick one as a favourite.

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    1. Thank you so much Meenakshi! Coming from you, these words mean a lot. Anything to improve in the form, composition or content?

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    2. Keep usage of articles to the minimum. Syllable count will come with practice.

      All said and done, your creativity shines through.

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    3. Thank you so much for your tips, Meenakshi! I did have the article bit in mind (having observed your Haiku writing) and most of the articles here come from the phrases I had to use. But I will definitely take care of it in future. I have seen how elegant your writing is, and the emphasis on keywords instead of articles contributes greatly to the composition.

      Keeping an earlier suggestion from you in mind, I have started looking up words in the dictionary to count the syllables :)

      Thanks again for your constant encouragement and help!

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  2. These are so beautiful Mixi ! Loved the way you have incorporated the phrases into the haiku. creative best ! :)

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    1. Thanks a bunch Maliny! Any tips towards better form and composition?

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    2. I am no expert, but i personally like writing haiku relating it to emotions. Every element of nature could be contorted in some way or the other to compare it with human emotions i feel. And as Meenakshi said, using simple yet sensuous words and keeping the word count few would impart that powerful punch :)

      You have done a great job for a first timer ! Looking forward to more :)

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    3. Thank you so much for replying, Maliny! I will keep these points in mind the next time I attempt Haiku. As you said, combining elements with emotions and using fewer but more lyrical words will add to the elegance of the composition.

      I really appreciate your feedback :) Thanks a ton!

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  3. Its good to appreciate the simple things in life, sometimes that is all that matters

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  4. Wow Mixi...I love what you have done! I have to go look and read again~
    Wondrous and beautiful :D

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    1. Thank you so much Ella! This is my first attempt at Haiku writing, so any tips you might have to offer would be greatly appreciated!

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  5. Simply superb! Amazing weave of words.

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  6. All are Gems Mixi. Truly magical

    Travel India

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    1. Thanks Vishal! Love the new photo page you've added to your blog!

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  7. Woohooo... first attempt at haiku..?? Unbelievable.. Truly beautiful words with equally beautiful choice of pictures.. :) *hats off*

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    1. Thank you for your encouraging words Maverick! :)

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  8. Really beautiful and elegant with truly ecclesiastical choice of pictures.. :)

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  9. Oh, that's some creativity, Mixi!! Brilliant!!
    Arghhh...that syllabic thingy is soo soo annoying! The google's syllable counter comes handy for me...
    Great compositions!!:))

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    1. Thank you Ma'am :) Yes, syllables are tricky :( But I'm trying to get over it :D

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  10. Nice job. Enjoyed them all.

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  11. These are lovely little nuggets!

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    1. Many thanks Karen :)

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  12. Beautiful set Mixi! I especially loved that wind haiku :)

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    1. Thank you so much Valli :)

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  13. Ditto, ditto, ditto--fine images.

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    1. Hehehe :D ditto Susan!

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  14. beautiful blend of words and imagery!

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  15. Your words match the images perfectly! I'm most fond of the one about the flowers stealing the sun.

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    1. Thank you Fireblossom! I know you're not a big fan of Haiku :D

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  16. I like the tercets (not haiku though), specially the first one ~

    Good set ~

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    1. Tercets! Now that's the word I was looking for but couldn't find! Thanks for both the nomenclature and the comments :D

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  17. lovely tercets.pics and words complementing each other.lovely.

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  18. What beautiful pictures and Haikus. I hope you don't mind that I have shared the link on a Facebook page where I'm an admin. The page is called <a href="https://www.facebook.com/EncouragementInADiscouragingWorld> Encouragement in a Discouraging World.</a>

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  19. Absolutely beautiful! They go so well with the photos..........I love each one!!!!

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    1. Thank you so much Sherry!

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  20. These are lovely. I think my favorite is the one about bamboo. It felt serene yet powerful.

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    1. Welcome to my blog T.A.

      Thank you for your kimd comment :-)

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  21. You did really good, Mixi. These apparently unrelated lines mesh like those sunflowers in the Tuscony field.
    ..

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    1. Thank you so much Jim!

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  22. Fantastic, Mixi. You made great use of the phrases!
    K

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  23. lovd reading every single word u wrote!!


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